Hmm, I wonder if we can get a critique thread? Got fics I wrote but I need help fixing/polishing them up.
As was mentioned by @Beginner
, you're free on asking for support here, though I think it should really pertain mostly to general questions. When you have a specific story or set of stories which you'd like people to read and/or provide feedback, I think it would be a better idea of authors would make their own thread.
Of course, if you're more comfortable just posting in here, then that's fine as it's compliant with the intent of the thread (and signed off by its creator anyway). I mostly appreciate that you are taking the time to participate in this section of the forum and share what you've written!
You caught my attention by the fact of it being a Maplestory fic. I don't think I have ever read anything lewd pertaining to this series, and any artwork I have is high in quality but not quantity. If you're interested, I could give it a read and offer my thoughts as well.
It might also help if you're a bit more specific if the sort of advice you'd like. I'm interpretating your post as needing us to point out any mistakes in spelling, grammar, word choice, etc. Let me know if that's correct and what else you may need us to consider when analyzing the fic.